Shattered Ultimately sub par.
Before delve into my list of critiques for this song, I would like to say that you do in, fact, have the components of a good song in here. However I can't whole-heartedly say that this song is above average, or even on par with what constitutes quality music, because unfortunately it is not. There are a myriad of issues with this song, but for the most part they all boil down to they way you present your sounds. The mix is awful, the lead guitar overpowers everything, and the bass and drums aren't fully support your song all the way through. Even the vocals weren't safe from the guitar's wrath, which for a blues song is a little more than unfortunate. I didn't look at the lyrics the first time I listened to this, and I couldn't make out what you were saying, in part it was because your voice itself could have used a little more "power" rather than just volume, and the poor mix doesn't help anyone. You also need to be a little more sensitive with pitch, as your blue-notes tend to go a little sharp and sound a little strange. The lyrics also are not perfect, and could use some work. Not the content of them, no matter how cheesy they are, but the actual spacing. Lines like: "When it does it's you begging for another fling" just don't fit into one measure and you end up having to rush the phrase. On the bright side most of these issues could be fixed by spending a little more time on the mix, and getting some better sounds. like I said at the top, the core isn't bad, but everything else just feels kind of cheep. Look forward to hearing your stuff down the road.
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All 22 ReviewsThis is exactly why i submit here before I go and share it with all of my expecting facebook friends. You guys are fucking brutally honest.
This submission is my first in ages- and all I've got to work with is my mexican Strat, modded accordingly to attempt a shot at making even with the American version. That and Garage Band, my macbook's mic, a Yamaha bass that I got for free, a MIDI keyboard I picked up for 20 bucks on a whim, a horribly broken heart, and (as of now) one last Keystone Ice 16 ouncer. This was a direct attack on my lady that wronged me and it does need work. Duly noted. But all in all, I feel better now that i shat some music out and have a good enough idea to not use use an entire package of toilet paper cleaning up the mess. I think I can clean it up and then some.
For the record-I'll take a guitar over a synthesizer any day. Thanks for being honest.
To long for what it is
You've got a few good riffs in here, but the problem is that this song is just to long for what it is. Don't get me wrong your main riff is damn catchy, you just need more to support it. You could go one of two roads with this song. First you could pair it down to a shorter length to give the individual riffs more punch and meaning. Less is more would be a great strategy for this song, if it aint broke don't fix it. The other more indulgent option would to be to add a lead guitar track. Some real full guitar solos would fill out the song great, and let it fill up not only this space, but an even larger one if you have enough ideas. This one of those songs that I would like to see get some more work, or at least another similar song, because you really do have some great ideas in this.
Great thanks for these tips ! Kinda hard to make a perfect song ! And yeah Its been maybe my 40e song.. I dont really rework them I prefer make new one with better structure and riff. For the lead I know I could get one over the top, but Ì always expect vocal to replace the emptyness that you kinda feel. I mean a 4min song without lyrics and power solo can be annoying sometime, but what ever, I'll keep in mind your review and try to make something better next time. Thanks for the support !
Fine for what it is.
What you have is a very solid piece of solo guitar work. The chords are nice, there is a fluid sense of time (which can be a little rare on the audio portal), and overall it works fairly well as it is. The only problem is that, by nature of being solo guitar work, it is not nearly close enough to what it has potential to be, for me to give it a high mark. The problem is that there is no infrastructure for the song to really ebb and flow because there is nothing supporting your melody. What this song really needs is a few extra parts to help flesh out what is there, and really bring it to life. My biggest recommendation would be to add a dedicated bass line. This would give something to the listener to latch on to whenever your chords, or general chord structure, changes. As a nice little bonus it would add another dimension to your sound just because you would have new notes being played because of the lower register. You could add another harmony part to this, but before doing that I would recommend putting in some form of percussion, or light drum track, into the song. Percussion is one of the best ways to round out a song and give it life, it's simply a sonic color unlike any other instrument. Like I said there really isn't anything wrong with the product you've put out for us, there are many songs that have many more core problems here on the audio portal than this, what you have is very strong. This is just one of those things that I would really like to see get pushed up to the next level.
Thanks for the great review. I do agree with some of your comments, although care must be taken not to overdo anything that is added to this piece, thus taking away from the Solo piece it was meant to be. Personally I would like to re-record this track. We will see how it goes. Thanks very much for your input, much appreciated.
Cheers gamejunkie.
By no means is this piece bad, it's just lacking.
With a name like "The Tank's Thunder" I was expecting a much darker and powerful piece. Instead I got a piece, while still dark, was much "brighter" than I was hoping for. The main problem was: it simply flowed to for its entirety. In most cases this is good, but this is another story. You didn't really recreate the raw power of the tank, and that's because it simply didn't have a point that reminded you of the pure might the title would suggest, as it flowed right on over where those points would have been. Now as I said the piece itself is not bad, I just felt that it needed something more, just to push it over the figurative edge.
- Rastamun21
Quite true Rastamun. I am not the first to agree and won't be the last. In my mind the story I had was... quite different and I saw a much more nobler, more symbolic degree then what is appropriate. More admiration then fear and destruction.
There is much i'd have liked to change about this song, sadly I have lost the original file and time constraints leaves me with no time to even attempt it. I am glad however that you enjoyed the piece.
Thank you for the review, I promise you will not find yourself thinking the same for the other pieces, or at least I hope you don't :D!
It just doesn't work...
The song itself is ok, but or a song like Gerudo Vally, witch is laid back, you can't use the whole Metal mindset really just doesn't do the song justice. The song Gerudo Vally is suposed to be light, and as I said the metal mindset makes it a bit thick for my tastes. On a side note, the song really needs that brass refrain after the main line, it just keeps the song's mood relaxed. So like i said before, what it all boils down to is the fact that you took away the basic element of the song, and tried to replace it with metal. All in all you get a 1 out of 5 and, a 2 out of ten... Better luck next time.
...Nah, it didn't need any brass. Or maybe... different distortion... I'll see that...
Well it is original.
... I am kind of scard now...
haha...good! It was the intention
It is different.
But in a good way. Not quite what i expected from Classical... But all is good.
Yeh I didn't know whether to submit this in classical than rock, i figured the actual classical bit at the end is longer then the rest..so yeh, thanks for the review!
Great. A true masterpice.
This has to be my favorite audio on newgrounds... It brings alot to my mind.
Thanks alot, all these reviews mean alot to me :)
this is in my opinoin the best komidogu theam
i like this 1 the mos
ps
did i spell komidogu right?
No, but that's ok. It's Kamidogu. And, since it's a made up word by the MK team, it doesn't really matter much.
i feel inspired
im gona go komit a trippale homoside thanks BEZO!
P.S.
Is that a good idea
Well, I don't know what a trippale homoside is (in fact, it sounds kinda gay), but if you want to go out and commit a triple homicide, go nuts. It's a great idea. I'm all for anything that reduces the number of people on Earth.
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